kahaanee kaa yathaarth aur samaaj kaa: shekhar joshee kee kahaanee kosee kaa ghatavaar ke bahaane ek bahas - seemaa maury

hindee kahaanee ke itihaas men usane kahaa thaa ke baad shekhar joshee virachit kosee kaa ghatavaar apanee tarah kee alag aur vishesh premakahaanee hai.

faujee javaan gunsaaee aur lachhamaa kee kahaanee, jahaan saansaarika arth men prem paraast hotaa hai. bade-boodhon kee jid lachhamaa kaa vivaah kaheen aur karavaa detee hai, kyonki gunsaaee anaath hai aur fauj men usakee jaan kaa bhee bharosaa naheen.¹ kahaanee bataatee hai ki lachhamaa kaa pati raamasinh bhee fauj men hai par usake peechhe bharaapooraa parivaar hai.

yaha manovijnyaan ki akele aadamee ko byaah kar betee snkat men pad sakatee hai aur udhar doosare aadamee par snkat aayaa bhee to parivaar dekhabhaal ke lie hai, khokhalaa nikalataa hai. raamasinh naheen rahataa aur kyonki manovijnyaan jatil vishayavastu hai, raamasinh ke jeth-jithaanee vaale parivaar kaa bhee ek manovijnyaan hai, jo vidhavaa lachhamaa aur bachche ko khud par bojh aur jmeen-jaayadaad par avaanchhit adhikaaree maanataa hai.

lachhamaa maayake laut aatee hai par vahaan bhee sabhee kuchh nashtapraay hai. udhar gunsaaee fauj pandrah saal kee sevaa samaapt kar gaanv laut aayaa hai aur kuchh man lagaa rahe isake lie use genhoo peesane kaa ghata/panachakkee lagaa lee hai. yahaan donon kee pandrah saal baad dobaaraa ek udaaseen-see mulaakaat hotee hai.

lachhamaa ne kabhee aanchalik graamadevataa gnganaathajyoo kee kasam lekar kahaa thaa ki gunsaaee jaisaa kahegaa vaisaa vah karegee, par usane kiyaa naheen. ye donon hee paatr ek jatil manovaijnyaanik sambandha aur tanaav men jee rahe hain, ek-doosare ke prati bhee aur samaaj ke prati bhee. ek or samaaj kee tathaakathit maryaadaa nibhaane kee maanasik chunautee hai doosaree ora apane gopan prem kaa bahut peedaa denevaalaa ahasaas. maryaadaa rah jaatee hai lekin kyaa prem mar jaataa hai ? ise samajhanaa bahut kathin hai. prem bhee marataa naheen, samaaj to baahar hai par man ke kone-antare bhee usee prem kaa ghar hain. gunsaaee ulaahanaa naheen de rahaa par use lagataa hai ki gnganaath kee jhootee ho chukee kasama se hee lachhamaa kaa anisht huaa hai, yah ek paramparaagat graameena manovijnyaan hai, jisamen devataaon kee bahut mahatvapoorn bhoomikaa hai - isee ke chalate vo kahaanee ke ant men bachche ke saath jaatee huee lachhamaa ko salaah detaa hai -

‘‘kabhee chaar paise jud jaaen to gnganaath kaa jaagar lagaakar bhool-chook kee maafee maang lenaa. poot-parivaar vaalon ko devee-devataa ke kop se bachaa rahanaa chaahie.’’ ²

gunsaaee ne lachhamaa ke bachche ko dekhaa hai, vah khud to akelaa hai par lachhamaa poot-parivaar vaalee hai, use isee baat kee chintaa hai ki ab lachhamaa kee jhootee pad gaee kasam kaa kop bachche par n ho - yah gunsaaee ke manojagat men lachhamaa ke prati usake prem kaa hee vistaar hai.

prema kaa saral sameekaran to yah kahataa hai ki abhee der naheen huee hai, ekaakee jeevan jee rahaa gunsaaee aur lachhamaa ek ho jaaen to donon kaa jeevan snvara sakataa hai, par saamaajik bndhanon men jo manosnsaar nirmit hotaa hai, vah jatilataa kee or jaataa hai. prem manovijnyaan kee drishti se vaise bhee bahuaayaamee vishay hai, jisakee dishaa vyakti-vyakti men badal jaatee hai. ab kahaaneekaar kaa manovijnyaan bhee dekhen ki unhonne apane vaamapnthee snskaaron aura prashikshan ke baavajood is kahaanee ke parivesh aur yathaarth kee maulikataa se samajhautaa naheen kiyaa hai, use jas kaa tas rahane diyaa hai.

prema kee varjanaa banee rahee hai. naayak-naayikaa ke uttarajeevan men prem sudhaar kar sakataa hai, usakee udaaseenataa aur vivashataa ko tod kar use jeevant banaa sakataa hai, lekin aisaa kuchh naheen ghatataa. is kahaanee men ‘‘kuchha shaashvat samasyaaon ko uthaate hue aanchalik mooly-maanyataaon kee seemaa kaa bhee dhyaan rakhaa gayaa hai, anyathaa kosee kaa ghatavaar men gahare romaanee sparsh ke star para lachhamaa aur gunsaaee ghatavaar kaa punarmilan itanaa neeras aur uddeshyaheen n hotaa.’’³ yahaan paramparaa se koee vidroh saamane naheen aataa hai, jeevana apane dharre par chalataa hai. ise kyaa dvandv kee kasautee par kahaanee kee asafalataa maanaa jaaegaa? naheen, yah kahaanee

lekhak ke un dinon kee tas‍veer
jab un‍honne kosee kaa ghatavaar likhee

vishayavastu se apane vyavahaar se paathakon men paramparaa aur roodhiyon ke prati dvandv jagaatee huee naveenataa ke sveekaar kaa aagrah prastut karatee hai. dvandv kahaanee men naheen, paathak ke man men chalataa hai - paramparaa se vidroh bhee kahaanee men naheen, paathaka ke man men ghatataa hai. kahaanee men varnit prem kee asafalataa dvandv kee vishishtataa ke isa star par kahaanee kee safalataa men badal jaatee hai.

kahaanee ke ant men tees banee rahatee hai ki lachhamaa to stree hai, use lok men vyaapt aachaar-vyavahaar aur lok-laaj se bhay adhik hai lekin gunsaaee ek purush hai, use aage badhkar lachhamaa ko apanaanaa chaahie. prashna usee yathaarthagat maulikataa kaa bach jaataa hai, jisakee rakshaa premachnda ne kafan men budhiyaa kee daaroon maut se kee thee aur shekhar joshee kee is kahaanee men unhonne usakee rakshaa lachhamaa aur gusaaee ke prem kee maut se kee hai.

yaha hamaaraa saamaajik yathaarth hai, jisakee keemat kabhee eka stree kee maut se chukaaee jaatee hai to kabhee usake prem kee maut se, par yahee yathaarth hai, ise kahaanee men naheen, samaaj men badalanaa hogaa. kahaaneekaara to bas snket kar sakataa hai ki yah yathaarth hai aur galat hai, ise aisaa naheen honaa chaahie, isamen badalaav kee aavashyakataa hai.

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1-kosee kaa ghatavaar, vahee, pratimaan prakaashan, 952-maalaveey nagar, ilaahaabaad, triteey sns‍karan 1988
pri0 62

2-vahee, pri0 74

3 -paandey, baalakrishn, meraa pahaad: asahamati-asveekaar kee kahaaniyaan, pustak sameekshaa, saahitya sampark,
ank -4, julaaee 1992

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seemaa maury kumaaoon vish‍vavidyaalay, naineetaal se naee kahaanee par shodh kar rahee hain. sam‍park : dvaaraa
pro.neerajaa tndan,hindee vibhaag, dee.es.bee.parisar, naineetaal-263 002 (ut‍taraakhnd)

kyaa chaahate ho tum cheekhon kaa ek mulk ?'

mere alfaajon men ‘daaminee kee aakhiree vidaaee desh ke naam...
aapake naam....
dimpal chaudharee (patrakaar)

mainne apanee rukhsatee kee shart par
apane hinndustaan ko
sharmasaar hone se bachaane kee koshish kee hai

lokhon betiyon, maanon, bahanon, bhaaiyon
aur karodon anjaan kndhon par savaar hogaa meraa shav

koee rudan, koee haahaakaar naa karanaa
meree shavayaatraa men


maan........
bataao naa mujhe yaada karogee naa
main..... main ladee maan.....
apanee saans ke marj hote aakhiree chhor tak
main ladee thee maan....
magar mere jisma ko aujaaron kee nakel ne
jmeer tak chhalanee kara diyaa thaa
mere jkhm mere jindaa rahane kee khvaahish ko
panaah naheen de paae maan......

magar maan.....
main maree naheen hoon naa hee khmoshee ke aale ko odhaa hai mainne
bas maut par mujhe dayaa aa gaee,
kab se daravaaje para takatakee lagaae
mere intajaar men thee

maan....
maut ko chunaa hai mainne
taaki sone kee chidiyaa kahe jaane vaale
mere is hinndustaan ke maathe par
meree badanaseeb maujoodagee kaa kalnk naa lage....
iseelie mainne maut ko chunaa hai maan...

aakhiree lamhon me

mere kaanon men aavaaj aaee thee kaheen se
ki pooraa desh meree jidagee kee duaan kar rahaa hai,
ki mere naam kee muhar ke binaa
hara kisee ke seene men meraa dard hai aaj
ye hara taraf se aatee hueen aavaajen
ye juloos, ye hujoom, ye cheekh,
ye shor, ye tadp....
saba meree hee to hain

ab main ...main kahaan rahee
main aba pooraa mulk ban gaee hoon
e mere desh
hajaaron aavaajon kaa inkalaab deke jaa rahee hoon
logon kee in garajatee insaaf kee dahaad men
mainne apane lie dard sunaa hai
e mere desh main jaa rahee hoon
magar isa dahaad ko yoon hee barakraar rakhanaa
taaki koee aur bahan, koee aur betee
una aujaaron, una atyaachaaron kaa rudan naa sahe
jise sahaa mainne, jise jiyaa mainne

jab us raat bas kee parachhaaee main
mujhe ujaadaa gayaa thaa
us raat sirf meree hee rooh chhalanee naheen huee thee
balki har ladkee us raat daaminee yaa amaanat banee thee
us raat mere saath
desh kee har aurat eka maut maree thee.......
maraa thaa ye atulya bhaarat,
maree thee insaaniyat,
maree thee ijjt,
maraa thaa meraa aangan, maree thee meree rooh
main to baabaa ke aangan men fir lautanaa chaahatee thee
ek aajaad chidiyaa kee tarah udnaa chaahatee thee
magar khoonkhaara baajon ke nukeele pnjon ne
mujhe noch daalaa........


magar ab ye shor
meree ye mulk ban chukee aavaajen
ab kisee aura bulabul ko
kisee aur chidiyaan ko
kabhee yoon marane naheen degee....
mere desh
meree rukhsatee me yah vaadaa de do
ki yahaan ab koee betee daaminee n banen

varnaa usakee cheekhen

mulk ban jaaengee

kyaa chaahate ho tum

cheekhon kaa ek mulk ?'

alavidaa.....

‘’dimpal sinh chaudharee’’

neelofr

vah

roj mere jhana men

shabanam banake jharaa karatee hai, chupachaap..

smritiyon kee haree ghaas par

n jaane kab aakara chipak jaatee hai

lipat jaatee hai mujhase

mujhe bachaa lo...

naheen kar paatee main kuchh.

ktaraa-ktaraa saafa shaffaak

shabanam kee boondon see paaradarshee vah

sachamuch lipat jaatee hai mujhase aur

roj-roj sooraja ke saath aane vaale ghaam men

n jaane kab bhaapa ban ke ud jaatee hai.

neelofr

jee haan yahee naama thaa usakaa.

neel ke rng kee tarah sundar aur spasht thee vah.

badee saaf thee usakee samajh

haan ke lie haan aur n ke lie n.

hamaaree taraha ghaalamel naheen karatee thee vah

n to vichaaron men, n hee jeevana men........

antararaashtreeya raajaneeti par bahas karatee thee vah

eeraak par amareekaa ke hamale ko vahashiyaanaa karaar diyaa thaa usane

us jmaane men bush seeniyar raashtrapati huaa karataa thaa amareekaa kaa.

rngon se kalaakritiyaan ukeratee thee vah

jis bhee deevaar para haath fer detee, jagamagaane lagatee...

aisee kalaakaar thee vah

usake haathon kaa hunar

baageeche men foola ban kar khilataa thaa.

jab vah chalatee to

kyaaree kee guladaaudiyaan use aavaaj lagaateen

neelofar.....neelofar.......neelofar...........

fir kahaan chooka huyee...?

kyaa huaa sare raah...?

kyon pagalaa gayee neelofar......?

khlaaon men guladaaudiyaan

aaj bhee aavaaj de rahee hain

neelofar.....neelofar....neelofar........

par kahaan rahee aba vo neelofar......

usake kamare kee deevaaron men ek bhee tasveer naheen hai aaj

usake baageeche foolon se bhare hue naheen hain aaj.....

kamare kee ekamaatra khidkee se

apanee badee-badee soonee aankhon se vah door ufk men dekhaa karatee hai

maanon sunanaa chaahatee ho guladaaudiyaane kee aavaaj

neelofar......neelofar..............neelofar.................

kyaa aap bataa sakate hain

kyaane paagal ho gayee neelofar?

usake lie jo ghara basaayaa gayaa thaa

vah use raas naheen aayaa kyaa?

yaa fir usakaa hamasafar?....

pataa naheen.......kyaa huaa....

usane kabhee kisee se kuchh kahaa naheen..........

kuchh bhee naheen.

shaayad yaheen galatee ho gayee hamase....

ham usakaa mauna naheen padh paae shaayad........

sabane samajhaa thaa ki aakhir hai to vah bhee ek aurat

dhala jaaegee....khaanche men............

para naheen..........

usane maun ko apane vidroh kee aavaaj banaa liyaa

aur ghuta gayee...........

cheekhee kyon naheen thee vah?

jor se chillaayee kyon naheen thee vah?....

pratirodh kyaane naheen kiyaa usane?

shaayad iseelie paagal ho gayee meree neelofar..........

kyaaneki apane hisse kaa cheekhee naheen vah...........

ladee naheen vah......

iseelie khaamosh ho gayee meree neelofar.

dajalaa-fraat, neel, hvaangaho, sindhu

miseesipee, volgaa se lekar

gngaa tak

tumhen kaheen mil jaae meree neelofar...

to jor se jhakajhoranaa use....

kahanaa use ki

chillaao.......itanee jor se chillaao....

ki saaree nadiyaan machal utthe....

aakul ho uthe samandar ki ye aavaaj kahaan se aayee....

ki brahmaanda men ho jaae suraakh

ki dolane lagen sattaaen.....

aur ye guladaaudiyaan jhoom-jhoom ke dene lagen aavaaj

neelofar.........neelofar...........neelofar............

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